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I breathed your name like wildflowers under vast broken skies, in wide-open spaces. The wind blowing through them spoke of dew and dirt and petrichor, and there was sunlight on the ground like a mosaic patterned by god's own hands.


I said it like a monarch claiming new land: a declaration, a butterfly breath over old earth; like it was coffee on a warm morning with the sun in my eyes, interlacing with my lashes; like it was a dream; like it was a prayer like it was a miracle wrought of air and bone and body: you, in, out, in, out, in and in and in.


I cried it out like an earthquake between lip and lip, continents that don't quite fit: your name, a fault line that doesn't know how to apologize.


And I whispered it like it had grown nothing where there should've been feathers, no wings to fly it on, like my lips were the nest it would always call home.


So I breathed it,
And I whispered it,
And I said it,
And I sang it,


Like a castle; like a mirror; like it was the big bang and everything all at once, for the first and last time.


And I know I'm only searching for something I might just call mine.
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The idea of belonging.


I actually wasn't going to post this because I feel terribly conflicted about it. When I finished writing it yester-early morning I felt like I had lost all control over it by the ending and it didn't mean what I wanted it to. But then I read it aloud, slowly, and I thought, okay, this isn't so bad, it's maybe something you could be proud of. Maybe. And maybe I'm just learning something new here. But ~theeggo liked it and encouraged me to share it here and he could be a writer if he put his mind to it. All that stuff about solar pupils and memory vs. exploration and you would understand if you went to our high school.


Please tell me what you think of this because I don't know what to.


And fuck this formatting, really.


No plagiarizing.

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=Wordeea Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
delicate like a dream ... i love the form you used and the last verse just sowed it all up together. truly beautiful
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~Flummoxative Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: You're wonderful, thank you.
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your wonderful work has been featured :rose:
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~Flummoxative Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Eeep, thanks so so much. :huggle: :heart:
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you're very welcome! (:
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~Adagiobunny Mar 5, 2013  Student Writer
the rhythm of the "and"s sweeps me away - especially the "in, out, in and in and in. I cried it out..." like a search, each section a new part of the path stepping forward. you are truly finding something here. :heart:
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~Flummoxative Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, and I hope that's what I achieved. :huggle:
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~Adagiobunny Mar 10, 2013  Student Writer
of course! :hug:
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Fantastic notions.
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~Flummoxative Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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